[Beauty Mark]

I guess, in a certain light, that comes off a snobby, because some people, for whatever reasons, are stuck behind retail for their lives.

I get what you're saying and why, since I'm always surprised when a lot of bright, talented people strive to work at such and such a retail store (not just MAC, but certain other retail stores) and end their goals at that, like they don't even strive to work as a manager or anything higher up than a retail person. I think a lot of people miss out on the bigger picture and idealize the company so much. However, it is always worthwhile to err on the side of caution when it comes to what you put on the internet. I'd personally change what you wrote to read something like this: While I currently work at MAC and love it, my goal is utilize this great experience to become an independent professional makeup artist.

You praise the company but let others know what you intend on doing with yourself, without slighting anyone. Keeping it positive should minimize the amount of people offend. I understand what you're saying, because I want to do more with my life than work administrative positions, although I do respect and understand their value.