In the first few shots (E and F) the foundation looks too dark, especially noticable in the first photo as you can referance against her hand. The hair in the face for these also detracts from the image.
C looks better, but still not quite right. It does look pretty good in five though, but this shot is largely ruined by the soiled shoes (and the styling in general bugs me, the sweater is not in good condition, and you don't get a clear sense of a "grunge" effect intended for the clothing, so it just detracts).
A and (no longer posted, same shoot) are far too blown out for portfolio use, but a few comments there. On A- watch your mascara application, the lashes are a bit clumpy and it causes them to look sparse in some areas. Your eyemakeup could use a bit more blending, particularly with the darker shade, and the foundation looks a bit blotchy around the eyes and mouth. On seven really need to watch your brows, these could use a bit of work with a spoolie and a touch up with the tweezers, and your fill-in work is a touch blotchy. Again, watch the corners of the mouth.
You're definitely off to a good start, the first set is very cataloge/lifestyle, what is your goal/target for your work?
I look forward to seeing more from you!